I just finished reading you fic. You have good style, nice flowing narration, I like dit^^ Also, Azazel and Riptide? Man, findinf a decent fic with them nowadays is a struggle in the flood of carles/Eric fanfics>_>
Saing that, I have a few issues with the story. Or maybe not with the story per se, but with characterisation of certain characters.
Riptide mainly - I am not sure i feel okay with his being portrayed as a 50's houswife=_= From whay I've seen of him in the movie - and comic books - he's kind of a badass. Hotblooded, spanish dude that takes no slack. Sure, he doesn't speak much in X-MenFC but I just get the feeling that in any relationship he'd be definitely on top. Seing him so... dependent on Azazel makes me feel weird. The "whatever decision you take, it's okay with me?" is pretty creepy. And that strange 'sexual freedom' that's implied in thei relationship? Seriosuly, no. Relationships don't work that way - 3P's are even quite different still. This is not love, or if it is, I just can't see it in this way. I take it as a sad thing that somewhere halfway trough the fic Riptide just leaves his own character and becomes just a willing 'yes-body'. I liked him quite a lot>_>
And I have one question. There;s one moment I don't quite get: The “J” sound does not occur in the Russian language, so it is substituted with first a “D” sound, and then followed by a Russian letter that makes the sound of a “Z” and an “H” together.
Are we talking about J like in Jake or in Spanish pronounciation as in J/Hesus? Because if we're talking about Spanish version, the H is present in Russian language. So is simple J (as in Jehova when it sounds like Y). If it's English pronaunciation, ten there's no letter in Russian that makes ZH sound. There's Z and there's Ż - a sound that paired with D, as in DŻ, is an quivalent to J in Jack. In this case, name Janos in Russian will not sound pretty much similar to it's English pronounciation, slavic accent aside. Sorry, it just won't leave me aloneXD I am just very curious about it^_^
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I just finished reading you fic. You have good style, nice flowing narration, I like dit^^ Also, Azazel and Riptide? Man, findinf a decent fic with them nowadays is a struggle in the flood of carles/Eric fanfics>_>
Saing that, I have a few issues with the story. Or maybe not with the story per se, but with characterisation of certain characters.
Riptide mainly - I am not sure i feel okay with his being portrayed as a 50's houswife=_= From whay I've seen of him in the movie - and comic books - he's kind of a badass. Hotblooded, spanish dude that takes no slack. Sure, he doesn't speak much in X-MenFC but I just get the feeling that in any relationship he'd be definitely on top. Seing him so... dependent on Azazel makes me feel weird. The "whatever decision you take, it's okay with me?" is pretty creepy. And that strange 'sexual freedom' that's implied in thei relationship? Seriosuly, no. Relationships don't work that way - 3P's are even quite different still. This is not love, or if it is, I just can't see it in this way. I take it as a sad thing that somewhere halfway trough the fic Riptide just leaves his own character and becomes just a willing 'yes-body'. I liked him quite a lot>_>
And I have one question. There;s one moment I don't quite get:
The “J” sound does not occur in the Russian language, so it is substituted with first a “D” sound, and then followed by a Russian letter that makes the sound of a “Z” and an “H” together.
Are we talking about J like in Jake or in Spanish pronounciation as in J/Hesus? Because if we're talking about Spanish version, the H is present in Russian language. So is simple J (as in Jehova when it sounds like Y). If it's English pronaunciation, ten there's no letter in Russian that makes ZH sound. There's Z and there's Ż - a sound that paired with D, as in DŻ, is an quivalent to J in Jack. In this case, name Janos in Russian will not sound pretty much similar to it's English pronounciation, slavic accent aside. Sorry, it just won't leave me aloneXD I am just very curious about it^_^