I did think of a few other things I'd change about the fic (if I haven't bored you to tears already).
-- One, the sub plot where Bobby, Wolverine, and Gambit get kidnapped by the Cetians. I didn't feel like it added much to the overall storyline, though obviously the Cetians become important at the very end.
-- I never did much with Mark. It was kinda cool to show how a nice normal guy can become an FOH solider, but other than that, what was the point of him?
-- A few other subplots also needed more of a point - Jubilee and Storm asking Wolverine if he wanted to sleep with Jubilee (did show that Storm was trying to keep Wolverine away from her heart, but still), and that colony of Endarians who were into the X-men (remember them? hopefully neither does anyone else).
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timeasmymeasure
Good lord, she's still not done...
Date: 2008-03-07 11:49 pm (UTC)-- One, the sub plot where Bobby, Wolverine, and Gambit get kidnapped by the Cetians. I didn't feel like it added much to the overall storyline, though obviously the Cetians become important at the very end.
-- I never did much with Mark. It was kinda cool to show how a nice normal guy can become an FOH solider, but other than that, what was the point of him?
-- A few other subplots also needed more of a point - Jubilee and Storm asking Wolverine if he wanted to sleep with Jubilee (did show that Storm was trying to keep Wolverine away from her heart, but still), and that colony of Endarians who were into the X-men (remember them? hopefully neither does anyone else).